Opening sequence planning

I have drawn some of the idea's we had for shots that we would like to include in our piece. We played about with the order of the shots so we get them in an order that makes sense.  We started with a shot of a calendar showing the date, that later comes into importance. We then move to a scene of a park where there is a pile of leaves that blow away to reveal a gun. We then move to a river by the park were there is an old boat shed, and we see a newspaper laying beside the river. The shot zooms in on the newspaper and it's an article about someone who has drowned. We then zoom in on the photo and cut to a live tilt of the girl, and the girls eyes open.